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You recently bought a children's toy online but when it arrived it was damaged

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing in the hope that you can help me with a problem regarding a children's toy that I recently bought. On 8 th May I purchased a toy from " New Life "store at Navai. The toy cost $200 and I paid for it on my credit card. I discovered to my horror, that the box which contained the toy did not include the eyes. I have been a very loyal customer of your company for many years and this is certainly not the quality that I have come to expect from you as you are the representative of the company in this company I would be grateful if you could arrange for the parts to be sent to me. I attach a copy of the reciept with this letter for your information. I look forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully Lucy
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing in the hope that you can
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help
me with a problem regarding a children's
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toy
that I recently
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bought
. On
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8 th
May I
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purchased
a
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toy
from
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"
New Life
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"
store at
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Navai
. The
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toy
cost $200 and I paid for it on my credit card. I discovered to my horror, that the box which contained the
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toy
did not include the eyes. I have been a
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very
loyal customer of your
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company
for
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many
years and this is
certainly
not the quality that I have
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come
to
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expect
from you as you are the representative of the
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company
in this
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company
I would be grateful if you could arrange for the parts to be
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sent
to me.
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I
attach a copy of the
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reciept
with this letter for your information.
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I
look forward to hearing from you Yours
faithfully
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Lucy

IELTS letter You recently bought a children's toy online but when it arrived it was damaged

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
148 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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