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You recently attended a local school in your community. We need people who can help with the renovation of the building, as well as some activities. Write a letter to the director and tell · How could you help? · When and why did you do this? · Who will help you?

You recently attended a local school in your community. We need people who can help with the renovation of the building, as well as some activities. Write a letter to the director and tell · How could you help? · When and why did you do this? · Who will help you? PM0LB
My name is Sandalu Sumudith and I work as a game developer in gaming unite. I am writing to inform you about the course which is related to my work field. It is the latest online course held by world famous gaming company, Ubisoft. Last week I saw some advertising related to this course and after that, I contacted them, and get more information about the course. 2D and 3D animation, character moulding are the main subjects in this lecture, as well as Dr. Tom, the most talented game designer is conducting this class. I think this lecture is important for numerous reasons. Of instance, when I completed this class I can handle many projects related game designs and furthermore, I can teach those things to our employees as well. It is the extremely good one I think. Well, I look to request about the time which I want to complete this class immediately. Programme was said they delivered class very friday, however I request them to speed-up the class for me and they agreed for it. So I need two week to complete this full course and I kindly requested to pass these days to me. I hope to be hearing you in the near future Yours Sincerely, Sandalu Sumudith
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Sumudith
and I work as a game developer in gaming unite. I am writing to inform you about the
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which
is related
to my work field.

It is the latest online
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course
held by world
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gaming
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, Ubisoft. Last week I
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advertising related to this
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course
and after that, I contacted them, and
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get
more information about the
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course
. 2D and 3D animation, character
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moulding
are the main subjects in this lecture,
as well
as Dr. Tom, the most talented game designer is conducting this
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class
.

I
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think
this lecture is
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important
for numerous reasons. Of instance, when I completed this
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class
I can handle
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many
projects related game designs and
furthermore
, I can teach those things to our employees
as well
. It is the
extremely
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good
one I
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think
.

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class
immediately.
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they delivered
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class
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very
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,
however
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me and
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I need two
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week
to complete this full
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and I kindly requested to pass these days to me.

I hope to
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be hearing
you in the near future

Yours
Sincerely
,

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IELTS letter You recently attended a local school in your community. We need people who can help with the renovation of the building, as well as some activities. Write a letter to the director and tell · How could you help? · When and why did you do this? · Who will help you?

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