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some people like to spend their money as soon as they earn it, while others think it is better to save their money for some time in the future.

some people like to spend their money as soon as they earn it, while others think it is better to save their money for some time in the future. 7W26A
Money concerns are a major cause of stress and anxiety in the modern world. In my opinion, It is a really wise idea to save money for the future. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. To begin with, Nowadays people saving money for the their future education. A person say, " Education is the passport to the future, for tomorrow belongs to those who prepare for it today". Therefore, education is valuable to everyone. My own experience is compelling example of this, one year ago I sincerely want join the math club. But that's too expensive, Therefore, I since that they I saving money for the math club. Today I can join to the my dream math club. Secondly, saving money for the future reason two is big prchase. Everyone can't suddenly buy big purchase. Accordingly, people need save money for their future. Big purchase is difficult obstacles for medium class family. For example, two years ago my family need to move other apartment. But we don't have lot of money, thus we're loan from the bank. Then my family realized need to the save money for the future. In conclusion, I believe that it is better to save money for the futurerather than spend it right away. I feel this way because we gain the ability to make better financial decisions as we mature, and because saving money helps us avoid the humiliating effects of unexpected financial loan.
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