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You recently attended a Consett and like the performance of the singer, how you will tell him, you want help in singing from him, how

You recently attended a Consett and like the performance of the singer, how you will tell him, you want help in singing from him, how KlXeR
Dear Mr Phone Ashry I am corresponding this letter with regard that I a big fan of your singing. As I would like to tell that your last perfomane in "united Art Gallery" was remark able, it made me senseless. Moreover your skills stuck me in that enviroment but the whole audience was like sleeping beauty. The way you play flute is fabulous as well ad breath taking. Besides you are like a megission whoes spell do not allow any body to go out of the way. I must say you are simply superb guy. Now I would like to tell you the reason of my writing is that I am a student of "Music and Art" in London university, I also run a local music band with some of my buddies. Further more we show our skills in native areas, the main purpose is to collect charity for handicapped childrens. As for as myself is concern I am taking some classes from a well known singer "John Pathra", where as I'm lacking in gattar and flute, now I want to seek from your skills as roll model. As my "the singers" band has a flute show at the end of next month with a tablue performane due to that I want your guidance. Although I know your time is very precious, you are busy with your concerts round the clock, so it would be a kind gesture if you could give me some time to enhance my ability in plying flute. In addition, this is purely instrumental programe where the lyrics would be quite and instruments will convey the message. Therefore, I want to send a VEDIO receding for your kind review and guidance. Thank you for giving time to my writing, Hope for a prompt and quick reply from your busy schedule. Yours truly, Simon smith
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Ashry
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big
fan of your singing. As I would like to
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tell
that your last
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perfomane
in
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united Art Gallery
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was remark able, it made me senseless.
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your
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skills
stuck me in that
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enviroment
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but
the whole audience was like sleeping beauty. The way you play
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flute
is fabulous
as well
ad breath taking.
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Besides
you are like a
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megission
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whoes
spell do not
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allow
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any body
to go out of the way. I
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must
say you are
simply
superb guy.

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Now
I would like to
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tell
you the reason of my writing is that I am a student of
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"
Music and Art
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"
in London university, I
also
run a local music band with
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some
of my buddies.
Further
more we
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show
our
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skills
in native areas, the main purpose is to collect charity for handicapped
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childrens
. As for as myself is concern I am taking
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some
classes from a well known singer
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"
John
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Pathra
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"
,
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where as
I'm lacking in
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gattar
and
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flute
,
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now
I want to seek from your
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skills
as roll model.

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As
my
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the singers
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band has a
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flute
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show
at the
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end
of
next
month with a
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tablue
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performane
due to that I want your guidance. Although I know your time is
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very
precious, you are busy with your concerts round the clock,
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so
it would be a kind gesture if you could give me
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some
time to enhance my ability in plying
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flute
.
In addition
, this is
purely
instrumental
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programe
where the lyrics would be quite and instruments will convey the message.
Therefore
, I want to
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send
a
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VEDIO
receding for your kind review and guidance.

Thank you for giving time to my writing, Hope for a prompt and quick reply from your busy schedule.

Yours
truly
, Simon smith
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IELTS letter You recently attended a Consett and like the performance of the singer, how you will tell him, you want help in singing from him, how

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  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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