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Letter of advice : I want to earn some money at the weekends, so I'm looking for a part time job in the cafe or a shop. Which do you think would be more fun

Letter of advice: I want to earn some money at the weekends, so I'm looking for a part time job in the cafe or a shop. Which do you think would be more fun jV2aL
Dear Seven, Thanks for your letter. How's it going? Hope that you and your family are doing well. Sorry that I've written for age. I received it 2 weeks ago, but I have to prepare for the final exam. I'm writing this letter to give a number of advices about looking for a part time job in the cafe or a shop. I had work experience and cafe shop When I was a freshmen. Thus, I think that the employees in the cafe is friendly and sociable. This make your work happier. On the contrary, you will meet lots of people; it is difficult for you to solve the whole problem that happens when you service customer. And the salary is not high, only twelve thousands for 1 hour. But when you work in a shop, It is boring. Because most of the shop just select one assistant, some shop their customer rate is low. And you must have the best memory to remember the cost of the clothes. However, the salary of shop is higher, about twenty thousands for one hour. Therefore, I think the best thing would be for you is to looking for a job in a shop. You will earn more money. Besides that, you have the best memory, too. So, I consider shop is suitable for you. I hope that this advice helps. Don't forget to write a letter to inform about your choice. Please write back soon. Lost of Love, Đông
Dear Seven, Thanks for your letter. How's it going? Hope that you and your family are doing well. Sorry that I've written for age. I received it 2 weeks ago,
but
I
have to
prepare for the final exam. I'm writing this letter to give a number of advices about looking for a
part time
job in the
cafe
or a
shop
.
I
had work experience and
cafe
shop
When I was
a freshmen
.
Thus
, I
think
that the employees in the
cafe
is friendly and sociable. This
make
your work happier.
On the contrary
, you will
meet
lots of
people
; it is difficult for you to solve the whole problem that happens when you service customer. And the salary is not high,
only
twelve thousands for 1 hour.
But
when you work in a
shop
, It is boring.
Because
most of the
shop
just
select one assistant,
some
shop
their customer rate is low. And you
must
have the best memory to remember the cost of the clothes.
However
, the salary of
shop
is higher, about twenty thousands for one hour.
Therefore
, I
think
the best thing would be for you is
to looking
for a job in a
shop
. You will earn more money.
Besides
that, you have the best memory, too.
So
, I consider
shop
is suitable for you. I hope that this advice
helps
. Don't forget to write a letter to inform about your choice.
Please
write back
soon
. Lost of
Love
,
Đông
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IELTS letter Letter of advice: I want to earn some money at the weekends, so I'm looking for a part time job in the cafe or a shop. Which do you think would be more fun

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
246 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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