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You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

Hello Mehak, Last week conference was very insightful and got to know more about technological developments in software field. The conference was more eccentric towards industry trending research and future threats. I would like to share my experience and knowledge from the conference with our team. The conference was focused on Network security threats and described the recent cyber attacks happened globally. As a knowledge sharing session, I would like to share my experience from the conference and discuss the impacts of Network security threats to software industry and mitigation plan to counter it. Additionally the focus would be on developing a robust software product and incorporation of cyber security to it. The important topics covered under the presentation would be the role of network security in software products, unknown threats, and the security plan. The Safety and security plan would broadly discuss the standards and best practices to bring the resilience against cyber crime. This would be very important session for our engineer to bring awareness about network security. I would propose a two hour presentation session which includes a quick break as well. Since network security is a growing concern in the digital industry, hence i would encourage all our software department engineer and the freshly joined graduated to attend it. It would be a great knowledge sharing session and gives our engineer an opportunity to learn the industry threats. I am planning to organize this presentation next week in wilbar conference room based on everyone's availability. Please let me know your opinion about this proposed knowledge sharing session and provide your valuable input to it. Regards, Gourav
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field. The
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trending research and future
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. I would like to share my experience and
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with our team.

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and discuss the impacts of
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security
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and mitigation plan to counter it.
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product and incorporation of cyber
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to it.

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products, unknown
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, and the
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plan. The Safety and
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plan would
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the resilience against cyber crime. This would be
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. I would propose a
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is a growing concern in the digital
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and gives our engineer an opportunity to learn the
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. I am planning to organize this presentation
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room based on everyone's availability.

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Regards,

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Gourav
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IELTS letter You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted You do NOT need to write any address.

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