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You've been select by a country to a short training course and you're requesting the Director of Education for financial help. Write Which course do you choose Why are you choosing that course What kind of help you need

Dear sir, I am writing this letter to request your financial assistance for my short-term course. I have recently applied for a course in your country and I have been provided with a vocational seat. I prefer to do Information Security as my training course. I am an Information Technology graduate currently working in the security domain in an IT company for the past 6 years. As an Information Security Admin, I believe that this course would help me gain the knowledge related to cyber security as well as the updates about patching and networking so that I could enhance my career to the next level. The course fee is 300$ which is approximately 210000 Indian rupee. Since I am from a poor economical background, I cannot afford to pay my tuition fee. Hence I request you to provide appropriate scholarships or fee-waiver schemes to fund my studies. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Tom Jose

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to request your financial assistance for my short-term You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdevelopmentseriessystemprogramplanway
course
. I have recently applied for a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdevelopmentseriessystemprogramplanway
course
 in your country and I have been provided
 with a vocational seat. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 prefer to do Information You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfreedompreservationsurveillancebondguaranteeinsurance
Security
 as my training course.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am an Information Technology graduate currently
 working in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfreedompreservationsurveillancebondguaranteeinsurance
security
 domain in an IT This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 for the past 6 years. As an Information You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfreedompreservationsurveillancebondguaranteeinsurance
Security
 Admin, I believe that this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdevelopmentseriessystemprogramplanway
course
 would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 me gain the knowledge related to cyber You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfreedompreservationsurveillancebondguaranteeinsurance
security
as well
 as the updates about patching and networking This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that I could enhance my career to the next
 level.

The You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdevelopmentseriessystemprogramplanway
course
 fee is The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$300".$300
300$
 which is approximately 210000 Indian Possible agreement error. The noun 'rupee' seems to be countable, so consider using: "rupees".rupees
rupee
. Since I am from a poor economical background, I cannot afford to pay my tuition fee. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Hence,
Hence
 I request you to provide appropriate scholarships or fee-waiver schemes to fund my studies.

I look forward to hearing from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours sincerely
,

Tom Jose