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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost

Dear Mr. Robinson, I am Sushanth Nair, working as a Software Engineer with TCS. I recently came across the information from a friend regarding a Data Analytics seminar to be conducted at Spain. I want to attend it and hence would like to know detailed information pertaining to dates, program topics, accomodation and cost of the seminar. Firstly, please let me know the month and the number of days the seminar is being planned for, as I would have to arrange my leaves accordingly. Also being a candidate from India, I will be really grateful if you could connect me with other participants from my country. Moreover, could you also also apprise me regarding the program topics and if there are any practical workshops for the application of topics which are taught. I also require information regarding the accomodation facilities provided or do I have to arrange for them on my own? Lastly, please let me know the total cost of the program. Awaiting your early response. Yours sincerely, Sushanth Nair

Dear Mr. Robinson,

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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

170 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

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