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You recently attended a concert festival. You had a great time; however, there was a problem that made experience less enjoyable. Write a letter to your best friend. In your letter: • Describe the best part of the show. • Describe what the issue was. • Describe the present you bought for him/her.

You recently attended a concert festival. You had a great time; however, there was a problem that made experience less enjoyable. Write a letter to your best friend. In your letter: • Describe the best part of the show. • Describe what the issue was. • Describe the present you bought for him/her. 7Lq83
Dear Selena, I hope this letter finds you in the pink of your health. I am writing to you to share about a musical concert that I attended last week in London. I got to know about this event through my cousin and I immediately asked her to book my ticket along with hers. It was a musical concert of none other than my favourite Nick Jonas. I was elated for this day and therefore, dressed up in my favourite jumpsuit. We both reached the venue ahead of time so that we do not miss even a single glimse of him. Haplessly, two young boys started quarreling in the centre of the ground and caught everyone's attention. The security guards mediated to stop them but they created a lot of nuisance in the event. Due to this, police personnels gathered, tightened the security and arrested them which delayed the arrival of the superstar. However, as soon as Jonas started his performance, everyone got engrossed in his voice and enjoyed the festival. Guess what? I have brought a beautiful t-shirt autographed by Nick Jonas and cannot wait to gift it to you. See you super soon.
Dear Selena,

I hope this letter finds you in the pink of your health. I am writing to you to share about a musical concert that I attended last week in London.

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I
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got
to know about this
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event
through my cousin and I immediately asked her to book my ticket along with hers. It was a musical concert of none other than my
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favourite
Nick Jonas. I
was elated
for this day and
therefore
, dressed up in my
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favourite
jumpsuit. We both reached the venue ahead of time
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so
that we do not miss even a single
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glimse
of him.

Haplessly
, two young boys
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started
quarreling in the
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centre
of the ground and caught everyone's attention. The security guards mediated to
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stop
them
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they created
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a lot of nuisance
in the
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event
. Due to this, police
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personnels
gathered, tightened the security and arrested them which delayed the arrival of the superstar.
However
, as
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soon
as Jonas
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started
his performance, everyone
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got
engrossed in his voice and enjoyed the festival.

Guess what? I have brought a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
t-shirt autographed by Nick Jonas and cannot wait to gift it to you.

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See
you super
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soon
.
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IELTS letter You recently attended a concert festival. You had a great time; however, there was a problem that made experience less enjoyable. Write a letter to your best friend. In your letter: • Describe the best part of the show. • Describe what the issue was. • Describe the present you bought for him/her.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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