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You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment. You left the apartment in good condition but the landlord will not return your deposit.

You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment. You left the apartment in good condition but the landlord will not return your deposit. 1w1A

Dear Mr Coleman, I am writing to request the return of the $800 deposit that I paid to you before I rented #21 Britannia Court for the month of April. When I telephoned your office I was told that you are not intending to repay this money and I am unable to understand the reason for this. When I signed the rental agreement it was my understanding that the deposit would be returned if the apartment was vacated clean and undamaged. This was the condition of the flat when I returned the keys. I cleaned the whole apartment and there were no breakages and no damage to fittings and furniture. I believe that I have kept to the terms of the agreement and therefore I respectfully request that my deposit be repaid in full. I shall have no alternative but to seek legal advice if we are unable to resolve this matter in a satisfactory manner. Your sincerely, Alexey

Dear Mr Coleman,

I am writing to request the return of the $800 deposit that I paid to you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 I rented #21 Britannia Court for the month of April. When I telephoned your office I was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :informed
told
 that you are not intending to repay this Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).money, and
money and
 I am unable to understand the reason for this.

When I signed the rental agreement it was my understanding that the deposit would be returned
 if the apartment was vacated
 clean and undamaged. This was the condition of the flat when I returned the keys. I cleaned the whole apartment and there were no breakages and no damage to fittings and furniture.

I believe that I have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 to the terms of the agreement and therefore
 I respectfully
 request that my deposit be repaid in full. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 shall have no alternative This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 to seek legal advice if we are unable to resolve this matter Consider replacing "in a satisfactory manner" with the adverb for "satisfactory"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a satisfactory manner
.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)Yours
Your
sincerely
, Alexey