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You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled.

You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. 5eAN
Dear Mr. Colleman, I am writing this letter to express my deep unsatisfactory with the news concern about the summer work placement program. I have just heard bad news from school that this program was canceled. One of the reasons why I chose to study a Business English course from June to August in your school is because the summer work placement was included in the program. When I started to seek a Business English course I have found a lot of schools that offer a similar course but no many who offer work in the local company as a part of the course. And despite the fact that your school has a pretty expensive offer I decided to take it because your program was a promise a better quality. But now I am very disappointed that I will not get all of your offers to me. As a course program is very different than have bought before and I think it will be fair if you could return all my money back. I look forward to hearing an answer from you soon. Your sincerely, Alexey.
Dear Mr.
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Colleman
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heard
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news from
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was canceled
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One of the reasons why I chose to study a Business English
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course
from June to August in your
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school
is
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because
the summer work placement
was included
in the
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program
. When I
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started
to seek a Business English
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course
I have found
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schools
that
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offer
a similar
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course
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many
who
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offer
work in the local
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company
as a part of the
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course
. And despite the fact that your
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school
has a pretty expensive
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offer
I decided to take it
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because
your
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program
was a promise a better quality.
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now
I am
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disappointed that I will not
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get
all of your
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offers
to me.

As a
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course
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program
is
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very
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different
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than
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bought
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before
and I
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it will be
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fair
if you could return all my money back.

I look forward to hearing an answer from you
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soon
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Your
sincerely
,

Alexey.
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IELTS letter You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
186 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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