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You ordered equipment online. However, when you received it, it was damaged. Send a letter to the manager of the company.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter regarding the purchase I have made from your online shop on Monday. My order is telephone LG SN2505, pink color, with 64 GB memory card. The full amount of 349 USD was transferred from my card at 15: 10: 18 on 17th of April. Sorry to inform you, but the item I purchased from your shop came with some damage. Once I received the package and opened the box, I found out that the screen had a huge crack in the middle. I would like to exchange my telephone with a new one during next 3 days. If it will not be possible I prefer a full refund to my bank card of 349 USD accordingly. I will also attach the receipt where you can find my details. Looking forward to hearing from you soon and hope this issue will be solved shortly. For any clarification please contact me throght email. Best regards, Lucy Odeh.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter regarding the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
 I have made from your online shop on Monday.

My order is telephone LG SN2505, pink color, with 64 GB memory card. The full amount of 349 USD was transferred
 from my card at 15: 10: 18 on 17th of April.

Sorry to inform you, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the item I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
purchased
 from your shop came with This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 damage. Once I received the package and opened the box, I found out that the screen had a huge crack in the middle.

I would like to exchange my telephone with a new one during next
 3 days. “If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
 it will not be possible I prefer a full refund to my bank card of 349 USD accordingly
. I will also
 attach the receipt where you can find my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
.

Looking forward to hearing from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 and hope this issue will be solved
 shortly. For any clarification This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 contact me Possible spelling mistake found.thrift
throght
 email.

Best regards,

Lucy Possible spelling mistake found.OderOdeOdesODEMOde h
Odeh
. 

IELTS letter You ordered equipment online. However, when you received it, it was damaged. Send a letter to the manager of the company.

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

164 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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