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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. In your letter: Introduce yourself and let him/her know why you are writing Express your appreciation And offer him/ her to visit your home with this family. You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. In your letter: Introduce yourself and let him/her know why you are writing Express your appreciation And offer him/ her to visit your home with this family. You do NOT need to write any address. NXjN
Dear Mr. Naik, I am writing this letter to show my interest to be the social events' organizer. I completed my studies in entrepreneurship and I did many projects on organizing events for marriage functions and so on. I would like to seize a chance of highlighting my skills as the organizer. (good idea! ) Furthermore, I would request to give me more detail information about the type of social events such as get to gather meeting or any kinds of ceremony. (MAJOR SENTENCE STRUCTURE/GRAMMAR ISSUES) Also, please let me know what all requirements I need to arrange for events. Moreover, I have the expertise to arrange decoration for the grand party with the arrangements for lunch, dinner and live singers for entertaining guests. I have lots of experience to choose the best clothes for brides and grooms in marriage function so, I can organise any social events If possible give me a chance to become an organiser. Thank you for your consideration. Yours sincerely, Amita Dholakia
Dear Mr.
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Naik
,

I am writing this letter to
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show
my interest to be the social
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events
' organizer. I completed my studies in entrepreneurship and I did
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many
projects on organizing
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events
for marriage functions and
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so
on.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to seize a chance of highlighting my
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skills
as the organizer. (
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good
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idea
!
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)


Furthermore
, I would request to give me more detail information about the type of social
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events
such as
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get
to gather meeting or any kinds of ceremony. (MAJOR SENTENCE STRUCTURE/GRAMMAR ISSUES)
Also
,
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please
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let
me know what all requirements I need to arrange for
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events
.

Moreover
, I have the expertise to arrange decoration for the grand party with the arrangements for lunch, dinner and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
singers for entertaining guests. I have lots of experience to choose the best clothes for brides and grooms in marriage function
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, I can
Do not mix variants of the same word ('organise' and 'organize') within a single text.
organise
any social
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
events


“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
possible give me a chance to become an
Do not mix variants of the same word ('organiser' and 'organizer') within a single text.
organiser
.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Amita
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Dholakia

IELTS letter After being involved in an accident, you were looked after by a person you did not know before. Write a special thank you letter to express your gratitude. In your letter: Introduce yourself and let him/her know why you are writing Express your appreciation And offer him/ her to visit your home with this family. You do NOT need to write any address.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
166 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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