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You need to take some time off of work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager.

Dear Maggi, I am writing to let you know that finally, we have moved to a bigger house! We just could not go on living in the two-bedroom apartment now that the children are growing up and we need more space for indoor activities. So we started looking and finally, here we are in our new home. I'm sure you'll love it. We have three bedrooms now and two balconies. The house comes with spacious bathrooms and a modern kitchen. The kids are happy because there is more space with the big living room and the garden outside. But James is perhaps the happiest of all because this house is near to his office. Why don't you come round this weekend and see what you think of our new place? We would all love to see you and if the weather is good we can have a barbecue party in the garden. Our new address and phone number are below, so give us a call and let us know when to expect you. Lots of love, Emma
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we
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looking and
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home.

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love
it. We have three bedrooms
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and two balconies.

The
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with spacious bathrooms and a modern kitchen. The

kids are happy
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there is more space with the
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living room and

the garden outside.
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James is perhaps the happiest of all
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this
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house
is near to his office.

Why don't you
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round this weekend and
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what you
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of our

new place? We would all
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love
to
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you and if the weather is
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we

can have a barbecue party in the garden.

Our new address and phone number are below,
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give us a call and
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us know when to
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you.

Lots of
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Emma

IELTS letter You need to take some time off of work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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