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. You make many different flavours of ice cream in bulk. A small ice cream shop has written an email asking for you to supply them and if you offer a discount. Write a reply email to them. You should decide on your level of formality, your subject line, and the language you wish to use to communicate your message. Write at least 160 words.

. You make many different flavours of ice cream in bulk. A small ice cream shop has written an email asking for you to supply them and if you offer a discount. Write a reply email to them. You should decide on your level of formality, your subject line, and the language you wish to use to communicate your message. 52ayP
Dear Sir or Madam Thank you very much for your email. I was so pleased to hear from you. I am sorry. I have not written to you straight away because I had to look after my mother in the hospital. I am writing with regard to express my response about the information and costs for the creams I create myself. I am not sure whether you have tried my homemade ice cream. If not, I will inform you that I have made ice cream in the following flavors: chocolate, mango, lemon, coconut, blueberry, and strawberry. My ice cream has a unique flavor since it is created entirely from natural ingredients and does not contain any artificial colors or additives. I am not sure what sort of type you want, so I will provide you with 60 kilograms of 10 kilograms each. I will continue to give you my stuff if you believe it is of excellent quality. Moreover, you have the option to return the order if you are disappointed. Because I am a wholesale supplier for small and major retailers around the country, my ice cream is highly popular. In terms of cost, if you purchase more than 100 kilograms, you will receive a discount. In contrast, there are three pricing if you buy less than 100 kilograms: mango, lemon, and coconut are 5, 000 VND, chocolate is 6, 000 VND and the other two varieties are 7, 000 VND since I have to import these two fruits from Dalat, so the price is greater. And since this is the current set price, I will not be able to decrease it any further. I think the price is very reasonable, and every other store takes it from me at that price. These are the details of my ice cream, If you would like any further information, please don’t hesitate to contact me at 0946789234. Alternatively, you may visit 14 Nguyen Du to observe the production or negotiate the trading price. I would be delighted to greet you. I thank you for your interest and look forward to hearing from you. Your faithfully Nguyen Thi Thuy Linh
Dear Sir or Madam

Thank you
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very
much for your email. I was
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so
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pleased
to hear from you. I am sorry.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have not written to you straight away
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I had to look after my mother in the hospital.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am writing with regard to express my response about the information and costs for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
creams
I create myself.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am not sure whether you have tried my homemade ice
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cream
. If not, I will inform you that I have made ice
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cream
in the following flavors: chocolate, mango, lemon, coconut, blueberry, and strawberry. My ice
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cream
has a unique flavor since it
is created
entirely
from natural ingredients and does not contain any artificial colors or additives. I am not sure what sort of type you want,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I will provide you with 60 kilograms of 10 kilograms each. I will continue to give you my stuff if you believe it is of excellent quality.
Moreover
, you have the option to return the order if you
are disappointed
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
I am a wholesale supplier for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
and major retailers around the country, my ice
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cream
is
highly
popular.

In terms of cost, if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
more than 100 kilograms, you will receive a discount.
In contrast
, there are three
Possible agreement error. The noun 'pricing' seems to be countable, so consider using: "prices".
pricing
if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
less than 100 kilograms: mango, lemon, and coconut are 5, 000 VND, chocolate is 6, 000 VND and the other two varieties are 7, 000 VND since I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
import these two fruits from
Possible spelling mistake found.
Dalat
,
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so
the
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price
is greater. And since this is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
set
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
, I will not be able to decrease it any
further
. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
reasonable, and every other store takes it from me at that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
. These are the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
of my ice
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cream
, If you would like any
further
information,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
don’t hesitate to contact me at 0946789234.
Alternatively
, you may visit 14 Nguyen Du to observe the production or negotiate the trading
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
. I would
be delighted
to greet you.

I thank you for your interest and look forward to hearing from you.

Your
faithfully


Nguyen
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Thi
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Thuy
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Linh
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IELTS letter . You make many different flavours of ice cream in bulk. A small ice cream shop has written an email asking for you to supply them and if you offer a discount. Write a reply email to them. You should decide on your level of formality, your subject line, and the language you wish to use to communicate your message.

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
357 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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