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You lost your bag from a Supermarket last week we stop the super market has closed down for a week and you can't get it. Your bag contains your mobile phone and some notes you need urgently, your driving licence and some important letters. Write to the manager to us how you can reclaim the bag

You lost your bag from a Supermarket last week we stop the super market has closed down for a week and you can't get it. Your bag contains your mobile phone and some notes you need urgently, your driving licence and some important letters. Write to the manager to us how you can reclaim the bag 17rX
Dear Sir/Madam, I am Jettin George, I am writing this letter to invite your attention towards a missing bag from your esteemed supermarket. On 23rd march 2020 I visited your store to purchase some household items. I came there directly after my office so I had two bags with me. Unfortunately, after reaching home around 11 o'clock I found that one of the side bag has been missing. Since I drive myself to home I definitely believe that my bag missing from Supermarket itself. Soon after noticing this I went to to the shop, to my surprise it was close, indeed, I saw a notice states that it would be closed for next one week. It was a piece of shocking news for me because all my profoundly important documents is inside of it, like my mobile, some note which is urgent for my superior some letters and especially my driving licence. I would like to request you to do some favour to find my bag. Infant, without that I can't even go to my office. It would be grateful if you could arrange some staff and search for my bag inside the supermarket. Please find the photo of my bag for identification purposes as well as my personal address. Awaiting for your positive response. Yours faithfully, Jetting George
Dear Sir/Madam, I am
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Jettin
George, I am writing this letter to invite your attention towards a missing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
from your esteemed supermarket.

On 23rd
The month "March" needs to be capitalized.
march
2020 I visited your store to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
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some
household items. I came there
directly
after my office
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I had two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
with me. Unfortunately, after reaching home around 11 o'clock I found that one of the side
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
has been missing.
“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
I drive myself to home I definitely believe that my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
missing from Supermarket itself.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Soon
after noticing this I went
Possible typo: you repeated a word
to to
the shop, to my surprise it was close,
indeed
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
a notice states that it would
be closed
for
next
one week. It was a piece of shocking news for me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
all my
profoundly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
documents is
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "inside".
inside of
it, like my mobile,
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some
note which is urgent for my superior
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some
letters and
especially
my driving
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licence
.

I would like to request you to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
to find my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
. Infant, without that I can't even go to my office. It would be grateful if you could arrange
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Use a plural noun after 'some' or use "staff members".
staff
and search for my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
inside the supermarket.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
find the photo of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
for identification purposes
as well
as my personal address.

Did you mean "awaiting" or "waiting for"?
Awaiting for
your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response. Yours
faithfully
, Jetting
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
George

IELTS letter You lost your bag from a Supermarket last week we stop the super market has closed down for a week and you can't get it. Your bag contains your mobile phone and some notes you need urgently, your driving licence and some important letters. Write to the manager to us how you can reclaim the bag

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
218 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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