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You live with a roommate at university but you have trouble studying because of a problem related to your roommate

You live with a roommate at university but you have trouble studying because of a problem related to your roommate My77p
Dear Mr. Smit, I am one of the students living on the campus, and I am writing to file a complaint about the hardship I am facing. I am a sophomore majoring in computer engineering at university, and I have to live in a dormitory to be close to the university and library. I have been living in a double-bed room with another student who is studying music. I face some difficulties with my roommate that seem to be unresolvable. As my roommate is studying music, he needs to spend a significant amount of time rehearsing his lessons. In addition, he invites his classmates, all of whom have vibrant personalities, enjoying loud activities, over three times a week both to enjoy their companionship and to practice their given notes. As a result, I can barely find a tranquil environment to concentrate on my study, or even to unwind. I have tried really hard to avoid any arising conflicts by spending most of my time at the library for the past month. However, I am done compromising. I believe that authorities should take pupil’s majors into account when assigning roommates so as to prevent these kinds of situations. As I have suffered significantly since the beginning of the term, I suggest that a dedicated single room be allotted to me for the rest of the term. In this way, the time that has been wasted would be compensated. I hope my situation will change as soon as possible. Sincerely yours, Mohammad Lea Shiva Ghorbani General
Dear Mr.
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Smit
,

I am one of the students living on the campus, and I am writing to file a complaint about the hardship I am facing.

I am a sophomore majoring in computer engineering at university, and I
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have to
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live
in a dormitory to be close to the university and library.
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I
have been living in a double-bed room with another student who is studying music.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
face
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some
difficulties with my roommate that seem to be unresolvable. As my roommate is studying music, he needs to spend a significant amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
rehearsing his lessons.
In addition
, he invites his classmates, all of whom have vibrant personalities, enjoying loud activities, over three
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
times
a week both to enjoy their companionship and to practice their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
notes.
As a result
, I can
barely
find a tranquil environment to concentrate on my study, or even to unwind.

I have tried
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to avoid any arising conflicts by spending most of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
at the library for the past month.
However
, I
am done
compromising. I believe that authorities should take pupil’s majors into account when assigning roommates
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
these kinds of situations. As I have suffered
significantly
since the beginning of the term, I suggest that a dedicated single room
be allotted
to me for the rest of the term. In this way, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
that has
been wasted
would
be compensated
.

I hope my situation will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
as
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soon
as possible.

Sincerely
yours,

Mohammad Lea

Shiva
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Ghorbani


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IELTS letter You live with a roommate at university but you have trouble studying because of a problem related to your roommate

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  American English
9 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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