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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir or Madam, I am YY, staying in the college accommodation room number 129. I am facing a few problems that I would like to bring to your kind notice. I have been sharing the room with two other students. They are both form another subject. The timings for exams and submissions of project works for all of us is different. Thus, we are unable to focus on our work. Whenever there is a submission for me, the other two have either finished their submissions or do not have any in the near future. Thus, while they want to relax and have leisure activity, it tends to disturb me with my work. It would be of great help if I am allotted another room, where the roommates are of the same subject. Or if possible, for an separate accommodation, would also be very helpful. Kindly look into the matter and do the needful at the earliest as the end semester exams are round the corner. Yours sincerely, YY

Dear Sir or Madam,

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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

168 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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