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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer klOO
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain for the accommodation conditions and ask for another room. The room in the college was provided to me in September, when I entered the historical faculty. Currently I am sharing the room with another student from Afghanistan, Mukhamed Ali. The problems I faced recently hinder me to execute my home work. Mukhamed, being a student of sport faculty, has special tasks for home. He is keen to be number one in everything, and what he does is exercising. During all the day he is doing running, jogging, stretching, bodybuilding. He also accompanies exercises with loud music, and as a result I completely cannot concentrate. I would like to ask for another room with preferably student from historical or math faculty. Should you happen to have any additional questions regarding the subject, please do not hesitate to contact me. Thank you very much, Faithfully yours,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to
The usual collocation for "complain" is "about" not "for". Did you mean "complain about"?
complain for
the accommodation conditions and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
another room.

The room in the college
was provided
to me in September, when I entered the historical faculty.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Currently
I am sharing the room with another student from Afghanistan,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Mukhamed
Ali.

The problems I faced recently hinder me to execute my home work.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Mukhamed
, being a student of sport faculty, has special tasks for home. He is keen to be number one in everything, and what he does is exercising. During all the day he is
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "going running".
doing running
, jogging, stretching, bodybuilding. He
also
accompanies exercises with loud music, and
as a result
I completely cannot concentrate.

I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
another room with
preferably
student from historical or math faculty.

Should you happen to have any additional questions regarding the subject,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
do not hesitate to contact me.

Thank you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much,

Faithfully
yours,
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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  American English
8 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
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