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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved 8pw5
Dear MR Ram, I am writing to this letter to suggest you some improvements which are required to adopt for the improvement of the cafeteria. With this letter I am going to explain you pros and corn of the cafeteria current condition. I am going to start with pros. The quality of food and taste of food of cafeteria is awesome. Also, student can get different types of food on reasonable price. Hence, most of student give preference to this cafeteria rather then the outside food shops. On the the other hand side there is some deficiencies in cafeteria. Like student need to wait long time for their food orders. Also, need to bring some improvement in sitting and waiters service. When some table free it should clean immediately. So that student do not wait for the table cleaning. Waiters should come to students to take their orders and food should be served on the students tables for order. Now, you know, Most of student like the payment online in lieu of the payment of cash. So you should start service of payment like paytm. Yours faithfully
Dear MR Ram, I am writing to this letter to suggest you
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cafeteria
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with pros. The quality of
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food
and taste of
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food
of
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cafeteria
is awesome.
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student
can
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get
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different
types of
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food
on reasonable price.
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, most of
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student
give preference to this
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cafeteria
rather
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then
the outside
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shops.

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other hand side there is
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some
deficiencies in
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cafeteria
. Like
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student
need to wait long time for their
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food
orders.
Also
, need to bring
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some
improvement in sitting and waiters service. When
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some
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table
free it should clean immediately.
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that
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student
do not wait for the table cleaning. Waiters should
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to take their orders and
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should
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students
tables for order.
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Now
, you know, Most of
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student
like the payment online in lieu of the payment of cash.
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So
you should
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start
service of payment like
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paytm
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Yours
faithfully

IELTS letter You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

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  American English
3 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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