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ou play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match

ou play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match AVbw
Dear John, My mate, hope you are doing great after the accident. I was sad to hear that you met with an accident on our quater final match day. The cricket match last friday was exciting as we won the match with a nail bitting finish. The oponnent team were pretty strong from the get go as they first batted and scored a big score of 190 runs in 20 overs. Since the wicket was damp because of the rain that fell last night, it was a perfect batting pitch for the oponnent team. Eventhough there was a huge on the board for us to reach, the boys from the team never lost hope. Finally the game reached in the final overs and we needed 15 runs from it. Tim our captain reached the goal by hitting 2 sixes and a 4! The match ended in a thrilling fashion as we won and qualified for semifinal of the cup. All the team members including me are wishing you to get well soon. We will see you soon at practice. see ya mate. best regards, shashank.
Dear John,

My mate, hope you are doing great after the accident. I was sad to hear that you met with an accident on our
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quater
final
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match
day.

The cricket
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match
last
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friday
was exciting as we won the
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match
with a nail
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bitting
finish. The
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oponnent
team were pretty strong from the
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get
go as they
first
batted and scored a
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big
score of 190 runs in 20 overs. Since the wicket was damp
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because
of the rain that fell last night, it was a perfect batting pitch for the
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oponnent
team.

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Eventhough
there was a huge on the board for us to reach, the boys from the team never lost hope.
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Finally
the game reached in the final
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overs and
we needed 15 runs from it. Tim our captain reached the goal by hitting 2 sixes and a 4!

The
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match
ended
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in a thrilling fashion
as we won and qualified for semifinal of the cup. All the team members including me
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are wishing
you to
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get
well
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soon
.

We will
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see
you
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soon
at practice.
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see
ya mate.

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best
regards,

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shashank
.
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IELTS letter ou play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match

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