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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons.

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons. Qp6x
Dear Sir/Madame, I am writing this letter to bring to your attention that I'm extremely dissatisfied with the behaviour of my roommate and I would really like for you to change my room next term. I am finding it extremely difficult to study in my room because my roommate always invites her friends over to our room where they play loud music and have parties. If this was a rare occurrence I would not have bothered you with this complaint but has become daily routine for her. To make matters worse, they borrow my stuff without asking and they are never returned to me. I cannot bear this any longer and its my humble request to you to please alot a single room to me in the next term. Yours faithfully, Garima Arora
Dear Sir/Madame, I am writing this letter to bring to your attention that I'm
extremely
dissatisfied with the
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
of my roommate and I would
really
like for you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
next
term. I am finding it
extremely
difficult to study in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
my roommate always invites her friends over to our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
where they play loud music and have parties. If this was a rare occurrence I would not have bothered you with this complaint
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
has become daily routine for her. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
matters worse, they borrow my stuff without
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
asking and
they are never returned to me.

I cannot bear this any longer and
Did you mean "it's" (="it is") instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
its
my humble request to you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
Possible spelling mistake found.
alot
a single
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
to me in the
next
term.

Yours
faithfully
,
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Garima
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Arora

IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
132 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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