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You live in a room in college which you share with another person, you find difficulties with work

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Date: 25. 05. 2021. To accommodation officer. Mr Halen. Dear Sir. I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction with accommodation in college. At the moment I have bad condition with my partner. As you know I am living here with another person who I have never seen him before, he is very strange for me. According to my disappointment I came here for business in a short time and your assistant supplied me with a single room. As my work very important I had to agree. However, my another issue he is very dirty and dull, he tried disturb me with necessary problems. He spoke laudly over the room on the phone. I have a lot work to do, but I could not do anything I would like to solve this situation as soon as possible. If it is possible, please exchange my room or my roommate soon. I look forward to hearing from you to correct the bad situation for me. Your faithfully. Mr J. Robins.
Date: 25. 05. 2021. To accommodation officer. Mr
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Halen
. Dear Sir. I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction with accommodation in college. At the moment I have
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bad
condition with my partner. As you know I am living here with another person who I have never
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seen
him
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before
, he is
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very
strange for me. According to my disappointment I came here for business in a short time and your assistant supplied me with a single room.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
my work
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very
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important
I had to
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agree
.
However
, my another issue he is
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very
dirty and dull, he
Probably a preposition is missing after 'tried'.
tried disturb
me with necessary problems. He spoke
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laudly
over the room on the phone. I have
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a lot work
to do,
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but
I could not do anything I would like to solve this situation as
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soon
as possible. If it is possible,
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please
exchange my room or my roommate
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soon
. I look forward to hearing from you to correct the
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bad
situation for me. Your
faithfully
. Mr J. Robins.
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another person, you find difficulties with work

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
168 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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