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Passport renewal letter requesting for renewal assistance

Passport renewal letter requesting for renewal assistance LB9nG
I am just wondering, since I'll l be accompanying mom on her passport renewal schedule. Can i also renew my passport together with my daughter who is just 8 years old, hoping for your kind consideration, we're trying to avoid too much public exposure since my mom is a immunocompromise person, so this would be really a good idea to do it all at once and less public place exposure. I am just wondering, since I'll l be accompanying mom on her passport renewal schedule. Can i also renew my passport together with my daughter who is just 8 years old, hoping for your kind consideration, we're trying to avoid too much public exposure since my mom is a immunocompromise person, so this would be really a good idea to do it all at once and less public place exposure. I am just wondering, since I'll l be accompanying mom on her passport renewal schedule. Can i also renew my passport together with my daughter who is just 8 years old, hoping for your kind consideration, we're trying to avoid too much public exposure since my mom is a immunocompromise person, so this would be really a good idea to do it all at once and less public place exposure.
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, hoping for your kind consideration, we're trying to avoid too much
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since my
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exposure. I am
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just
wondering, since I'll l be accompanying
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mom
on her
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passport
renewal schedule. Can
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
also
renew my
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passport
together with my daughter who is
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just
8 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
, hoping for your kind consideration, we're trying to avoid too much
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public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exposure
since my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mom
is
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
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immunocompromise
person,
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so
this would be
really
a
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good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to do it all at once and less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
place
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exposure
. I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
wondering, since I'll l be accompanying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mom
on her
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
passport
renewal schedule. Can
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
also
renew my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
passport
together with my daughter who is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
8 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
, hoping for your kind consideration, we're trying to avoid too much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exposure
since my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mom
is
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
Possible spelling mistake found.
immunocompromise
person,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
this would be
really
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to do it all at once and less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
place
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exposure
.
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IELTS letter Passport renewal letter requesting for renewal assistance

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
210 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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