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You live in a room in college which share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college.

You live in a room in college which share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. n9jn
Dear Sir, I am writing you in regards to the situation related to the accommodation arrangement which is getting very problematic for me. Let me further elaborate you in detail. It started off with the change of my roommate which I had no problem in the past. My current housemate is really inconsiderate about my personal space and things I owned. He always brings his friends for movies which troubled me while preparing for my assignments and class-work. Moreover, the critical part is that my exam is about to begin which requires full concentration due to the inclusion of research submission that will have a great impact on my future career. I would like to request for the change of accommodation with the preference of environment in which I can focus on my studies and work on my research along as well. I will be very thankful to you if the changes can be made as my future depends on it. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Respectfully, Syed Waleed Aftab
Dear Sir,

I am writing you
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in regards to
the situation related to the accommodation arrangement which is getting
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very
problematic for me.

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Let
me
further
elaborate you in detail. It
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started
off with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of my roommate which I had no problem in the past. My
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
housemate is
really
inconsiderate about my personal space and things I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
. He always brings his friends for movies which troubled me while preparing for my assignments and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
-work.
Moreover
, the critical part is that my exam is about to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
which requires full concentration due to the inclusion of research submission that will have a great impact on my future career.

I would like to request for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of accommodation with the preference of environment in which I can focus on my studies and work on my research along
as well
. I will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
thankful to you if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
can
be made
as my future depends on it.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
Respectfully
,

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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
171 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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