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You live in a room in college that you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement, and you find it very difficult to work. describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You live in a room in college that you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement, and you find it very difficult to work. describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer WbY0
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing to complain about the issues I am facing at my student residence. I am a resident of the King Edward Hall, room 503 and I am sharing a room with an undergraduate student from the Music faculty. I am highly disappointed with the management decision to accommodate a medical student with a music student in the same room because our field of study demands very different lifestyles. I am a final year medical student currently in the later stages of doing my dissertation and I require a quieter environment to work on the research papers. However, my roommate consistently plays her instruments and often brings friends over to practice with her, which is extremely distracting and have a negative impact on my work. I would appreciate it if you could provide me with a furnished studio apartment in another residence for the rest of my stay. If this arrangement is not available, could you please transfer me to a quieter location with a more studious flatmate. I look forward to your favourable response. Yours faithfully, Audrey Raines
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing to complain about the issues I am facing at my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
residence.

I am a resident of the King Edward Hall, room
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
503 and
I am sharing a room with an undergraduate
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
from the Music faculty.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
highly
disappointed with the management decision to accommodate a medical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
with a music
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
in the same room
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
our field of study demands
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
lifestyles.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am a final year medical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
currently
in the later stages of doing my dissertation and I require a quieter environment to work on the research papers.
However
, my roommate
consistently
plays her instruments and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
brings friends over to practice with her, which is
extremely
distracting and have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on my work.

I would appreciate it if you could provide me with a furnished studio apartment in another residence for the rest of my stay. If this arrangement is not available, could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
transfer me to a quieter location with a more studious flatmate.

I look forward to your
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourable' is British English.
favourable
response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Audrey
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Raines

IELTS letter You live in a room in college that you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement, and you find it very difficult to work. describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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