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You live in a residential area where you believe the security is not as high as it should have been. And due to this, lately, some minor incidents took place. You think your residential area needs better security. Write a letter to the president of the welfare committee of your residential area. In your letter, say why you are writing mention why you believe the current security is not adequate explain what action you want him/her to take

You live in a residential area where you believe the security is not as high as it should have been. And due to this, lately, some minor incidents took place. You think your residential area needs better security. Write a letter to the president of the welfare committee of your residential area. In your letter, say why you are writing mention why you believe the current security is not adequate explain what action you want him/her to take ok11B

Dear sir or Madam, I am Anna, a home owner at woodlands area where you hire the chair of president. I am writing this letter to bring into your notice about an incident that has happened in our area of residence. There is some theft happened during the last week in our colony of residence. Three of the families were the victims of this attempt. And we noticed few young people is roming around the area specially in the evening time. I felt there is need of more security in our place, as these type of incidents taking place much regularly. And all the people who lives here felt the same way that our security system is not adequate and well equipped. I would suggest that to employ more young people for the post of guards. So that they will be able to check around the places and report. Installing CCTV will benefit for the security of the residence. I hope you will take this in consideration for enhancing the safety of the people stay around the area. Yours sincerely Anna.

Dear sir or Madam, I am Anna, a This word is normally spelled as one.homeowner
home owner
 at woodlands You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 where you hire the chair of president. I am writing this letter to bring into your notice about an incident that has happened in our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
 of residence. There is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 theft happened during the last week in our colony of residence. Three of the families were the victims of this attempt. And we noticed few young You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.amarearen
is
Possible spelling mistake found.comingrowingroaminghomingrovingrooming
roming
 around the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
specially
 in the evening time. I felt there is need
 of more security in our place, as these type of incidents taking place much regularly
. And all the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 who Did you mean "live"? Alternatively, check whether the singular of 'people' should be used.live
lives
 here felt the same way that our security system is not adequate and This word is normally spelled with hyphen.well-equipped
well equipped
. I would suggest that to employ more young You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 for the post of guards. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 that they will be able to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
check
 around the places and report. Installing CCTV will benefit for the security of the residence. I hope you will take this in consideration for enhancing the safety of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 stay around the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfieldoperationrangespace
area
. Yours sincerely
 Anna. 

IELTS letter You live in a residential area where you believe the security is not as high as it should have been. And due to this, lately, some minor incidents took place. You think your residential area needs better security. Write a letter to the president of the welfare committee of your residential area. In your letter, say why you are writing mention why you believe the current security is not adequate explain what action you want him/her to take

Letter

American English

1 paragraphs

181 words

5.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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