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Write a personal letter describing a new family business

Write a personal letter describing a new family business 73pgY
Dear Mom How have you been? I hope you are well. I would like to give you some good news about our dreamy business. I found an excellent place for our book café. It is in a good region and just suitable for our purpose. Finally, we can start our family business and will expand it. It would be great you come and visit the place. I’m interested in contract and buy this beautiful place and start our business. I hope to see here before end of next week. Warm wishes, Your daughter, Azadeh
Dear Mom

How have you been? I hope you are well.

I would like to give you
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some
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good
news about our dreamy business.
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I
found an excellent place for our book café. It is in a
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good
region and
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just
suitable for our purpose.

Finally
, we can
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start
our family business and will expand it.

It would be great you
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come
and visit the place. I’m interested in contract and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
place and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
our business.

I hope to
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see
here
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before
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end
of
next
week.

Warm wishes,

Your daughter,
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Azadeh
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IELTS letter Write a personal letter describing a new family business

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
93 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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