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You learned a piece of news from your friend regarding a part-time job at a new international company near your house. Write a letter to that company. In your letter, you should: Explain why you need that job Give the details of what you can do for the company Suggest the time that you can work.

You learned a piece of news from your friend regarding a part-time job at a new international company near your house. Write a letter to that company. In your letter, you should: Explain why you need that job Give the details of what you can do for the company Suggest the time that you can work. doGB6
Dear Sir/Ma'am, I am writing this letter to let you know that I have applied for a part-time job in your company. The necessity behind the job, as I am international student money is the essential part to pay my expenses and most importantly I am studying in a computer science course, working at your organization could enhance my skills and experience to get a relevant job in Multi-national companies. To pinch for me I would say, I would grave benefit for your premises if you hire me. As I am educating the same field, the training session would be reduced, I can lead with the innovative ideas. In addition, my apartment is just a few steps far from your building, as result, there would be no chances of getting late and will be present for emergency situations. I can start work at any time you offer. Being a scholar, I can only be available for short-time work. In particular, the services can be provided for 24 hours a week, on the weekend timing may be extended and can begin at 11 am in the morning till 5 pm evening and it is flexible according to the tasks. I am looking forward to hearing a beneficial response from you in the near future. Yours sincerely,
Dear Sir/Ma'am,

I am writing this letter to
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let
you know that I have applied for a part-time job in your
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company
. The necessity behind the job, as I
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am international
student money is the essential part to pay my expenses and most
importantly
I am studying in a computer science course, working at your organization could enhance my
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skills
and experience to
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get
a relevant job in Multi-national
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companies
.

To pinch for me I would say, I would grave benefit for your premises if you hire me. As I am educating the same field, the training session would be
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reduced
, I can lead with the innovative
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ideas
.
In addition
, my apartment is
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just
a few steps far from your building, as result, there would be no chances of getting late and will be present for emergency situations.

I can
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start
work at any time you offer. Being a scholar, I can
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only
be available for short-time work.
In particular
, the services can
be provided
for 24 hours a week, on the weekend timing may
be extended
and can
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begin
at 11
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am in the morning
till 5 pm evening and it is flexible according to the tasks.

I am looking forward to hearing a beneficial response from you in the near future.

Yours
sincerely
,
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IELTS letter You learned a piece of news from your friend regarding a part-time job at a new international company near your house. Write a letter to that company. In your letter, you should: Explain why you need that job Give the details of what you can do for the company Suggest the time that you can work.

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215 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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