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You invite your friend to family party

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Dear TomI am writing a letter to you to invite a family party. It is my little son's birthday party on 25 th of September. He will be 10 years old on this day. If you come to this party. I am very glad from you. All my close friends are coming to this party. we have a good time and we talk and we remember our young events. I am planning to cook our national dishes. they are shashlik, somsa and others. and also I invite to the party famous singers. they are yulduz usmonova, Anvar Sanaev. I think all our friends like these singers. One more important thing I should tell you You should prepare a nice classical song to the party becouse boys like your voice very much, it had better take your guitar to the party. it will be a music party every guest dances and sings. If you come to the party. Please my new contact number 998978911858. I think can not find the way becouse l have bought a new house in the centre of the city. I hope you will come to my little son's birthday party. I think you can find time to come the party becouse we are the closest friends all over the world, we have seen for ages. Best wishes Bobur
Dear
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TomI
Did you mean "am I"?
am
writing a letter to you to invite a family
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party
. It is my
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little
son's birthday
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party
on
Did you mean "25th"?
25 th
of September. He will be 10 years
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old
on this day.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you
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come
to this
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party
. I am
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very
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glad from
you. All my close friends are coming to this
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party
.
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we
have a
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good
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time and
we
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talk and
we remember our young
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events
. I am planning to cook our national dishes.
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they
are
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shashlik
,
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somsa
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and others
.
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and
also
I invite to the
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party
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famous
singers.
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they
are
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yulduz
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usmonova
,
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Anvar
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Sanaev
. I
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think
all our friends like these singers. One more
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important
thing I should
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tell
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you You
should prepare a nice classical song to the
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party
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becouse
boys like your voice
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very
much, it had better take your guitar to the
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party
.
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it
will be a music
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party
every guest dances and sings.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you
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come
to the
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party
.
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Please
my new contact number 998978911858. I
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think
can not find the way
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becouse
l have
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bought
a new
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house
in the
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centre
of the city. I hope you will
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come
to my
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little
son's birthday
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party
.
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I
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think
you can find time to
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come
the
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party
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becouse
we are the closest friends all over the world, we have
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seen
for ages. Best wishes
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Bobur

IELTS letter You invite your friend to family party

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
221 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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