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You have seen an advertisement in this week’s magazine that invites suitable candidates to apply for the sales manager position in a company. v. 2

Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently noticed an advertisement in the Weekly Times magazine that announces a job vacancy for the position of sales manager in your company. I am writing to offer myself as a deserving candidate for the post. I have been working in Cubical Property and Resource Management as a senior marketing officer for the last three years and my total experience in this field accounts for approximately 6 years. I have completed my B. Com from the University of Leeds with a distinction and then completed M. B. A from Cardiff University. As a commerce major, I started my professional life in the arena of marketing and I truly enjoy this challenging position. I have been in the marketing sector ever after I left university. I am enclosing my curriculum vitae that outlines my academic and professional profile in details for your kind consideration. I am driven by passion, goal and integrity. I will surely be a valuable asset to your company and would like to discuss my candidacy for the post in person. I can be reached at +44 020 6534 anytime you wish. Yours faithfully, Oliver Gill

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in this week’s magazine that invites suitable candidates to apply for the sales manager position in a company. v.2

Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently noticed an advertisement in the Weekly Times magazine that announces a job vacancy for the position of sales manager in your
company
. I am writing to offer myself as a deserving candidate for the post.
I
have been working in Cubical Property and Resource Management as a senior marketing officer for the last three years and my total experience in this field accounts for approximately 6 years.
I
have completed my B. Com from the University of Leeds with a distinction and then completed M. B. A
from
Cardiff University. As a commerce major, I
started
my professional life in the arena of marketing and I
truly
enjoy this challenging position. I have been in the marketing sector ever after I
left
university. I am enclosing my curriculum vitae that outlines my academic and professional profile in
details
for your kind consideration.
I
am driven
by passion, goal and integrity.
I
will
surely
be a valuable asset to your
company
and would like to discuss my candidacy for the post in person.
I
can
be reached
at +44 020 6534 anytime you wish. Yours
faithfully
, Oliver Gill
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
6 paragraphs
193 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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