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You have seen an advertisement in this week’s magazine that invites suitable candidates to apply for the sales manager position in a company. v. 3

Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently noticed your job advertisement for the post of sales manager at the Rubin Gorham Inc. and wish to apply for the position. I am hoping to meet you in person to further discuss my candidacy. I earned my bachelor degree in Marketing and Finance from Macquarie University in Sydney, Australia in 2015 and then migrated to the United Kingdom as a permanent resident to stay with my mother. Having finished my graduation in marketing and finance, I immediately joined Lucas Inc. , a large car manufacturing company in Australia. I worked with them as a marketing executive for two and a half years and was promoted to the senior marketing researcher position after a year. I quit the job to move to the UK in early 2017. Now I am working as a sales lead for a manufacturing company in London. I am a self-motivated individual and love to make sales happen under my direct supervision. I manage a team of 8 members and take my responsibility religiously. I am quite positive that I would be a valuable asset to your company. I, herein, enclose my curriculum vitae which states my educational and professional details for your kind consideration. I look forward to meeting you soon in a formal interview. Yours faithfully, Nicole Tyler

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in this week’s magazine that invites suitable candidates to apply for the sales manager position in a company. v.3

Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently noticed your job advertisement for the post of sales manager at the Rubin
Gorham
Inc. and wish to apply for the position. I am hoping to
meet
you in person to
further
discuss my candidacy.
I
earned my bachelor degree in Marketing and Finance from Macquarie University in Sydney, Australia in 2015 and then migrated to the United Kingdom as a permanent resident to stay with my mother. Having finished my graduation in marketing and finance, I immediately
joined
Lucas Inc.
,
a large car manufacturing
company
in Australia. I worked with them as a marketing executive for two and a half years and
was promoted
to the senior marketing researcher position after a year. I quit the job to
move
to the UK in early 2017.
Now
I am working as a sales lead for a manufacturing
company
in London. I am a self-motivated individual and
love
to
make
sales happen under my direct supervision. I manage a team of 8 members and take my responsibility
religiously
.
I
am quite
positive
that I would be a valuable asset to your
company
.
I
, herein, enclose my curriculum vitae which states my educational and professional
details
for your kind consideration.
I
look forward to meeting you
soon
in a formal interview. Yours
faithfully
, Nicole Tyler
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
7 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≤ 6
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