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You recently went shopping at the local supermarket. When you got home and noticed your bill, you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase. v.2

You recently went shopping at the local supermarket. When you got home and noticed your bill, you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Emma Ariana, a frequent shopper of your mega mall. Yesterday I went to your mall located in Rainbow Complex and purchased a few items. However, after I returned home and noticed my bill, I was bewildered as I was billed for items that I have not purchased! I hope you would rectify the error made by one of your employees. In relation to the specifics of the purchase, I bought a pair of sandals, a towel, a bottle of shampoo, a coffee mug, a box of chocolate, cat food, shower gel and some packeted foods, for which I have been billed and in addition 115 dollars for items I have not picked at all! My invoice number is MR8-C1254, dated 15th May 2019, and the invoice amount is $247. It shows that I have purchased a large flower vessel, a doormat and a water purifier! This must be a mistake! I was in a hurry and did not cross-check the items against the bill while checking out from the queue. But I am sure the salesgirl, whose name is Marinda, had made some sort of mistake while printing my invoice. I would like you to refund the extra amount next time I visit your shop and make sure this unwanted situation does not repeat. Yours faithfully, Emma Ariana
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Emma Ariana, a frequent shopper of your mega mall. Yesterday I went to your mall located in Rainbow Complex and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
a few
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
.
However
, after I returned home and noticed my bill, I
was bewildered
as I
was billed
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
that I have not
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purchased
! I hope you would rectify the error made by one of your employees.

In relation to the specifics of the
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purchase
, I
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bought
a pair of sandals, a towel, a bottle of shampoo, a coffee mug, a box of chocolate, cat food, shower gel and
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some
Possible spelling mistake found.
packeted
foods, for which I have
been billed
and
in addition
115 dollars for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
I have not picked at all! My invoice number is MR8-C1254, dated 15th May 2019, and the invoice amount is $247. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
that I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
a large flower vessel, a doormat and a water purifier! This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be a mistake!

I was in a hurry and did not cross-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
items
against the bill while checking out from the queue.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
I am sure the salesgirl, whose name is
Possible spelling mistake found.
Marinda
, had made
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
sort of mistake while printing my invoice.

I would like you to refund the extra amount
next
time I visit your shop and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure this unwanted situation does not repeat.

Yours
faithfully
,

Emma Ariana
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently went shopping at the local supermarket. When you got home and noticed your bill, you found that you had been charged for items you did not purchase. v. 2

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  American English
7 paragraphs
223 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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