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You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper for swimming lessons at your community sports centre.

You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper for swimming lessons at your community sports centre. BnPX
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that I have seen your advertisement in the local newspaper. I would like join swimming class at you community sport center. Let me clear out why I want to join. I am aarthi and I work as Technical engineer at SQS, Chennai. I got transfer to client location, Mumbai and presently I have been located near Dhadhar area. I have been participated district level swimming competition and won the second prize. The next level of swimming competition will be held at the end of next month. As such, I cannot win without practice. So, I prefer to join your sports community as its very closer to my current location. Would you kindly share the timing and cost for per classes. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, aarthi J
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I have
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seen
your advertisement in the local newspaper. I would like
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
swimming
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class
at you community sport center.

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Let
me
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clear
out why I want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
. I am
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aarthi
and I work as Technical engineer at
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SQS
, Chennai. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
transfer to client location, Mumbai and
presently
I have
been located
near
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Dhadhar
area.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have
been participated
district level swimming competition and won the second prize. The
next
level of swimming competition will
be held
at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of
next
month. As such, I cannot win without practice.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
your sports community as its
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
closer to my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
location.

Would you kindly share the timing and cost for per classes.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
aarthi
J

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper for swimming lessons at your community sports centre.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
141 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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