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You have learned that a financial organisation in your city gives money as a loan to students who like to take a part-time course. You are interested to do the course and have decided to take a loan. Write a letter to a local financial organisation. In your letter, give your qualifications and work experience give details about the course explain how this course will help you

You have learned that a financial organisation in your city gives money as a loan to students who like to take a part-time course. You are interested to do the course and have decided to take a loan. Write a letter to a local financial organisation. In your letter, give your qualifications and work experience give details about the course explain how this course will help you Pawj

Dear Sir/Madam, I’ve heard about your financial organisation from a friend and I’m writing you this letter to see if I’m eligible to benefit of the loan you are offering to students longing to have a part time course. I am a holder of phd degree In Physics. Moreover, I have many years of experience in research as well as in teaching physics for high school and university levels. I got recently a role of teaching physics for the international baccalaureate program (IB). As you know this is a special program and ones need to take a professional workshop and courses to further develop his teaching skills. The course is going to start in February 3 and last for 6 weeks. This course is an introduction to IB physics, where you are introduced to the IB philosophy as well as IB learner profile that should a student possess. This workshop as well has modules that improve your ability as a teacher to supervise and conduct researches related to internal assessments and Extended essays. Due to the financial crisis our country is passing through my school asked to me to ask an organisation to fund this workshop which will cost 450$. This workshop is important to me as well as to students and our country. I hope you take this into consideration and I will be waiting your positive response soon. Sincerely yours

Dear Sir/Madam,

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organisation
 from a friend and I’m writing you this letter to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 if I’m eligible to benefit of the loan you are offering to students longing to have a This word is normally spelled with hyphen.part-time
part time
 course.

I am a holder of The more common abbreviation of the term 'philosophiae doctor' is "PhD".PhD
phd
 degree In Physics. Moreover
, I have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 years of experience in research as You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstrongtogether
well
 as in teaching physics for high school and university levels. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 recently a role of teaching physics for the international baccalaureate program (IB). As you know this is a special program and ones need to take a professional You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlaboratorymillstudioplant
workshop
 and courses to further
 develop his teaching This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
. The course is going to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
Did you mean "on February"? This seems to be a day date.on February
in February
 3 and last for 6 weeks. This course is an introduction to IB physics, where you are introduced
 to the IB philosophy as You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstrongtogether
well
 as IB learner profile that should a student possess. This You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlaboratorymillstudioplant
workshop
 as You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstrongtogether
well
 has modules that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 your ability as a teacher to supervise and conduct researches related to internal assessments and Extended essays.

Due to the financial crisis our country is passing through my school This is a collocation error. You do not need a preposition after 'asked'. Remove it: "asked".asked
asked to
 me to ask an Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.organization
organisation
 to fund this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlaboratorymillstudioplant
workshop
 which will cost The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$450".$450
450$
.

This You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlaboratorymillstudioplant
workshop
 is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 to me as You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstrongtogether
well
 as to students and our country. I hope you take this into consideration and I will be waiting your This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 response This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Sincerely
 yours