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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her Write at least 150 words.

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her PaDj
Dear Ramya, I hope this letter finds you in best of your health. I'm writing to you with reference to your previous letter. In which you have started that you need my advice to choose between goiing for college or else getting a job. I don't think it is a good idea to continue with your studies; moreover, I know how much your family is financially drowning, due to your father's sudden demises. In fact you won't be in a situation to enjoy your college life as well as concentrate on your daily classes. Since your family is very badly affected in the financial aspect, I would suggest you to go for a job rather than to the college. Your salary can be utilised to pay the morterage loan as well as the car loan. And your mother's pension will be enough for other monthly expenses. Once you are settled with the debts, you can rejoin the classes like our Principal suggested. I suggest you to join Army, because once it was your dream to be an Army officer. I recently read in newspaper that Army recruitments will start by next month and for that applications made through online. I believe defence and security force sector will suite you better than being an engineer. I hope this letter would have cleared your delimma to some extent. Yours truly, Rugma
Dear
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Ramya
,

I hope this letter finds you in best of your health. I'm writing to you with reference to your previous letter. In which you have
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started
that you need my advice to choose between
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goiing
for college or else getting a job. I don't
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think
it is a
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good
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idea
to continue with your studies;
moreover
, I know how much your family is
financially
drowning, due to your father's sudden demises. In
The comma is probably missing here: "fact, you".
fact you
won't be in a situation to enjoy your college life
as well
as concentrate on your daily classes.

Since your family is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
badly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
in the financial aspect, I would suggest you to go for a job
rather
than to the college. Your salary can be
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utilised
to pay the
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morterage
loan
as well
as the car loan. And your mother's pension will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
for other monthly expenses. Once you
are settled
with the debts, you can rejoin the classes like our Principal suggested.

I suggest you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
Army,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
once it was your dream to be an Army officer. I recently read in newspaper that Army recruitments will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
by
next
month and for that applications made through online.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
believe
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defence
and security force sector will suite you better than being an engineer.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope this letter would have cleared your
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delimma
to
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some
extent.

Yours
truly
,

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Rugma
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IELTS letter You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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  American English
7 paragraphs
228 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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