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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter say why she would not enioy going to college, explain why getting a job is a good idea for her, suggest type of job that would be suitable for her.

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter say why she would not enioy going to college, explain why getting a job is a good idea for her, suggest type of job that would be suitable for her. w2Jr
Dear haruka, Hello haruka. I am writing a reply to your letter that asking for advice about whether to go college or to try to get a job. I thing trying a job is better for you. I would like to write resaon why? At first, I will mention about disadvantage of going to college. I think you wound not enjoy it because in a college, especially japanse college, you could only meet people who are around your age as you. You must have already met such a people in your junior high school. In addition to it, many students tend to just have fun with freinds beside study. The reason why this happen, it is usually very difficult to enter japanese college but to graduate it is not so difficult. For this reason, many students tend to just have enjoy, like having parties, going out, travelling. However College costs a huge of money on you. The fee of it is not cheap of course. I think it is waste of money to go to college. Next, I would tell you why getting a I b is good idea for you. The most valuable point is experience. Not like college, you can see many people of different age. By talking to them, you can get many knowledge of life and it would be good for you. Not only from people, you can also get important experience from working. You could know how difficult to earn mony and also you can know many social system as well. Lastly, I would like to suggest the type of job that would suitable for you. I think you good at talking with people, so reception of company, school or hotel would be good. You can meet not only colleague but also many people of customers. If you would get a job of hotel, you can use your English skill as well. In conclusion, you should try to get a job for these reasons. Good luck for you. Yours lovingly, Rupinder
Dear
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haruka
, Hello
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haruka
. I am writing a reply to your letter that asking for advice about whether to go college or to try to
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get
a
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job
. I
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thing
trying a
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job
is better for you.
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I
would like to write
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resaon
why?

At
first
, I will
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mention about disadvantage
of going to college. I
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think
you wound not enjoy it
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because
in a college,
especially
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japanse
college, you could
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only
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meet
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people
who are around your age as you. You
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must
have already met such a
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people
in your junior high school.
In addition
to it,
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many
students tend to
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just
have fun with
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freinds
beside study. The reason why
The verb 'happen' is plural. Did you mean: "this happens"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
this happen
, it is
usually
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very
difficult to enter
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japanese
college
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but
to graduate it is not
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so
difficult.
For this reason
,
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many
students tend to
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just
have
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enjoy
, like having parties, going out, travelling.
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However
College costs
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a huge of
money on you. The fee of it is not
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cheap
of course
. I
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think
it is waste of money to go to college.

Next
, I would
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tell
you why getting
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a I
b is
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good
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idea
for you. The most valuable point is experience. Not like college, you can
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see
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many
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people
of
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different
age. By talking to them, you can
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get
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many knowledge
of life and it would be
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good
for you. Not
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only
from
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people
, you can
also
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important
experience from working. You could know how difficult to earn
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mony
and
also
you can know
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many
social system
as well
.

Lastly
, I would like to suggest the type of
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job
that would suitable for you. I
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think
you
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good
at talking with
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people
,
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so
reception of
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company
, school or hotel would be
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good
. You can
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meet
not
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only
colleague
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but
also
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many
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people
of customers. If you would
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get
a
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job
of hotel, you can
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use
your English
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skill
as well
.
In conclusion
, you should try to
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a
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job
for these reasons.
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Good
luck for you.

Yours
lovingly
,
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Rupinder
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IELTS letter You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter say why she would not enioy going to college, explain why getting a job is a good idea for her, suggest type of job that would be suitable for her.

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5 paragraphs
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5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
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