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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You have decided to apply for the job. v.8

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You have decided to apply for the job. v. 8
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for a part-time job in your museum shop during the holiday. I am very keen to have a part-time job during this summer vacation, specifically in a shop where I would be able to learn and meet people from diverse backgrounds. I am hoping that you would consider my application and give me the chance to work for you. I am a teacher in an elementary grammar school and I teach history. I am 26 years old and have completed my graduation from arts major. I can speak English, Sinhala and Tamil fluently. Last year, I worked in a large bookshop during my vacation and enjoyed it very much. I would like to meet new people and serve my position with dedication, commitment and hard work. I enjoyed going to your museum a few months ago and I spent a considerable amount of time there. I visited your museum shop with a team and I am familiar with the types of items your store sells to visitors. I think you will be kind enough to consider me as a suitable candidate for this position. I look forward to hearing from you soon and further discuss my candidacy for the job. Yours faithfully, Ama Nikole
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for a part-time job in your museum shop during the holiday. I am
very
keen to have a part-time job during this summer vacation,
specifically
in a shop where I would be able to learn and
meet
people
from diverse backgrounds.
I
am hoping that you would consider my application and give me the chance to work for you.

I
am a teacher in an elementary grammar school and I teach history.
I
am 26 years
old
and have completed my graduation from arts major.
I
can speak English,
Sinhala
and Tamil
fluently
. Last year, I worked in a large bookshop during my vacation and enjoyed it
very
much. I would like to
meet
new
people
and serve my position with dedication, commitment and
hard
work.

I enjoyed going to your museum a few months ago and I spent a considerable amount of time there.
I
visited your museum shop with a
team and
I am familiar with the types of items your store sells to visitors.
I
think
you will be kind
enough
to consider me as a suitable candidate for this position.

I
look forward to hearing from you
soon
and
further
discuss my candidacy for the job.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ama
Nikole
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You have decided to apply for the job. v. 8

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
212 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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