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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You have decided to apply for the job. v.7

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You have decided to apply for the job. v. 7
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the part-time job at your City Museum shop in response to a job advert that was published in the Daily Observer on 27th March 2020. I am a third-year student at Lincon College and my major is history. We are currently on our summer break and I am hoping to gain some valuable work experience and would like to discuss my possible employment opportunity in your museum shop. Our college has declared a summer holiday from 1st June to 30th March 2020. I will be free during these days and would be able to work full-time or part-time as per your requirement. I worked in a local history Museum in my hometown for eight months in early 2018. In addition to that, I am quite good with computers and numbers. I believe I would be a great asset to your business. I am passionate about history and museums since my childhood. There is no Museum in this city that I haven't been to. I love your Museum as it has a wide variety of historical objects and abundant audio-visual library. I know how important the shop is in terms of selling antiques and collector's items to the visitors. I am positive that I can boost your sells. I believe that my enthusiasm for history and museum and relevant skills will make me a good candidate for this position. I am ready to discuss further in a formal interview at any time. Yours faithfully, Sandeep Parekh
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for the part-time job at your City
Museum
shop in response to a job advert that
was published
in the Daily Observer on 27th March 2020. I am a third-year student at
Lincon
College and my major is
history
. We are
currently
on our summer
break and
I am hoping to gain
some
valuable work experience and would like to discuss my possible employment opportunity in your
museum
shop.

Our college has declared a summer holiday from 1st June to 30th March 2020. I will be free during these days and would be able to work full-time or part-time as per your requirement.

I worked in a local
history
Museum
in my hometown for eight months in early 2018.
In addition
to that, I am quite
good
with computers and numbers. I believe I would be a great asset to your business.

I am passionate about
history
and
museums
since my childhood. There is no
Museum
in this city that I haven't been to. I
love
your
Museum
as it has a wide variety of historical objects and abundant audio-visual library. I know how
important
the shop is in terms of selling antiques and collector's items to the visitors.
I
am
positive
that I can boost your sells.

I
believe that my enthusiasm for
history
and
museum
and relevant
skills
will
make
me a
good
candidate for this position.
I
am ready to discuss
further
in a formal interview at any time.

Yours
faithfully
,

Sandeep
Parekh
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You have decided to apply for the job. v. 7

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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