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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: – Explain why you would like the job – give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ – say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing to express my interest in the job of a nanny for your kid for six months. I have seen your advertisement in a magazine that you need someone for taking care of your six year old. I would love to do this as I like children and have been taking care of my two year old nephew since he was four months old. This is because both my brother and his wife were working and hence I took the responsibility of my nephew happily. Moreover, I have two years of experience as a baby-sitter with five different families, and they all appreciated my work. In addition to this, I am a calm and extrovert person and easily mingle / gel with the small children which make me a suitable candidate for the job. I am coming to Australia to visit my sister on a six month visa and hoping to spend my free time in visiting different places there. If you offer me this job, I would get a chance to earn money for myself, and learn about a new culture. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Adam Ray
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in the job of a nanny for your kid for six months.

I have
seen
your advertisement in a magazine that you need someone for taking care of your six year
old
.
I
would
love
to do this as I like children and have been taking care of my two year
old
nephew since he was four months
old
. This is
because
both my brother and his wife were working and
hence
I took the responsibility of my nephew
happily
.

Moreover
, I have two years of experience as a baby-sitter with five
different
families, and they all appreciated my work.
In addition
to this, I am a calm and extrovert person and
easily
mingle / gel with the
small
children which
make
me a suitable candidate for the job.

I am coming to Australia to visit my sister on a
six month
visa and hoping to spend my free time in visiting
different
places there. If you offer me this job, I would
get
a chance to earn money for myself, and learn about a new culture.

I look forward to hearing from you
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Adam Ray
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter: – Explain why you would like the job – give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ – say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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