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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing this letter to request you to relocate my work to our head office for 6 months. As you know I am currently handling America's new project, and I cannot cope up their timing with our working hours. As a result, I am working day and night together. I will not be able to continue like this due to the health issues. I would like to hand over my duties of this branch to my assistant for six months and I can follow up with him every weekend about the progress of his work. If you would give permission to work in our head office, it will be a great help for me. I would expect you will arrange the accommodation as well during that periods. Please understand my situation and please do the temporary transfer procedures as soon as possible to resolve this issue. Yours faithfully, John Philip

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing this letter to request you to relocate my work to our head office for 6 months.

As you know I am currently
 handling America's new project, and I cannot cope up their timing with our working hours. As a result
, I am working day and night together. I will not be able to continue like this due to the health issues.

I would like to hand over my duties of this branch to my assistant for six months and I can follow up with him every weekend about the progress of his work.

If you Consider removing ‘would’. (Usually, ‘would’ does not occur in a conditional clause, unless to make a request or give a polite order.)gave
would give
 permission to work in our head office, it will be a great This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 for me. I would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :anticipate
expect
 you will arrange the accommodation as well
 during that periods.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
 understand my situation and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 do the temporary transfer procedures as This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 as possible to resolve this issue.

Yours faithfully
,

John Philip

IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

153 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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