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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing this letter to request you to relocate my work to our head office for 6 months. As you know I am currently handling America's new project, and I cannot cope up their timing with our working hours. As a result, I am working day and night together. I will not be able to continue like this due to the health issues. I would like to hand over my duties of this branch to my assistant for six months and I can follow up with him every weekend about the progress of his work. If you would give permission to work in our head office, it will be a great help for me. I would expect you will arrange the accommodation as well during that periods. Please understand my situation and please do the temporary transfer procedures as soon as possible to resolve this issue. Yours faithfully, John Philip
Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing this letter to request you to relocate my work to our head office for 6 months.

As you know I am
currently
handling America's new project, and I cannot cope up their timing with our working hours.
As a result
, I am working day and night together. I will not be able to continue like this due to the health issues.

I would like to hand over my duties of this branch to my assistant for six months and I can follow up with him every weekend about the progress of his work.

If you
Consider removing ‘would’. (Usually, ‘would’ does not occur in a conditional clause, unless to make a request or give a polite order.)
would give
permission to work in our head office, it will be a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
for me. I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
you will arrange the accommodation
as well
during that periods.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
understand my situation and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
do the temporary transfer procedures as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible to resolve this issue.

Yours
faithfully
,

John Philip
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IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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  American English
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153 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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