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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter - explain why you would like the job, give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ, say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Ella and I am from New Zealand. I am writing regarding your recent advertisement in Sunday Employment Magazine. I think I would be a good fit considering my background in children’s education. Due to recent pandemic situation I lost my employment and am currently looking for new opportunities. Teaching kindergarten students for past 10 years have given me the experience to handle children with ease. Being around them makes me comfortable. I do enjoy teaching and playing with kids while also handling first aid if needed. Not only do I have a college degree with relevant experience under my belt, but also professional training in first aid and paramedical sciences. This makes me ideal for handling any kind of situation that might occur, good or otherwise. I would spend my free time exploring Australia, visiting tourist attractions and trying some local cuisine. I am especially fond of Australian wines and would love to learn the art. Please contact me if you feel I fit your requirements. Best Regards, Ella
Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is
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Ella and
I am from New Zealand. I am writing regarding your recent advertisement in Sunday Employment Magazine. I
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think
I would be a
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good
fit considering my background in children’s education. Due to recent pandemic situation I lost my employment and am
currently
looking for new opportunities.

Teaching kindergarten students for past 10 years have
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given
me the experience to handle children with
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ease
. Being around them
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makes
me comfortable. I do enjoy teaching and playing with kids while
also
handling
first
aid if needed.

Not
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only
do I have a college degree with relevant experience under my belt,
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but
also
professional training in
first
aid and paramedical sciences. This
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makes
me ideal for handling any kind of situation that might occur,
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good
or
otherwise
.

I would spend my free time exploring Australia, visiting tourist attractions and trying
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some
local cuisine. I am
especially
fond of Australian wines and would
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love
to learn the art.

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Please
contact me if you feel I fit your requirements.

Best Regards,

Ella
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter - explain why you would like the job, give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ, say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
173 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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