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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. v.3

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. v. 3 8eOP
DEAR MA'AM I AM WRITING TO LET YOU KNOW THAT I HAVE READ YOUR ADVERTISEMENT IN AUSTRALIAN MAGAZINE AND I WANT TO INQUIRE IF STILL AVAILABLE, IM ROAN LIAO 30 YEARS OLD AND CURRENTLY EMPLOYED AS A CAREGIVER, BUT IT WILL END MY CONTRACT NEXT MONTH. I AM PSYCHOLOGY GRADUATE AND CERTIFIED CAREGIVER AND FIRST AIDER, MY JOB PRESENTLY IS THE SAME WITH YOUR JOB OFFER, I AM ALMOST A DECADE WORKING IN THIS LINE OF JOB, I DO COOKING, CLEANING, AND DRIVING THE CHILDREN TO SCHOOL AND I ALSO THEIR TUTOR, SO IF YOU HIRE ME I WILL ASSURE YOU THAT YOU WILL NOT GOING TO REGRET IT. I WILL GOING TO LOVE YOUR CHILD AS MY OWN EVEN THOUGH ITS A SHORT PERIOD OF TIME. IF YOU NEED MORE INFORMATION MY NUMBER AND EMAIL ADD ENCLOSE TO THIS LETTER. I AM LOOKING FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU. RESPECTFULLY YOURS, ROAN LIAO
DEAR MA'
Possible grammar error. Make sure that 'AM I AM WRITING' is correct.
AM I AM WRITING
TO
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
LET
YOU KNOW THAT I HAVE READ YOUR ADVERTISEMENT IN AUSTRALIAN MAGAZINE AND I WANT TO INQUIRE IF
STILL
AVAILABLE,
Make sure that 'IM' is an abbreviation (instant message, individual medley, infectious mononucleosis). Did you mean "I'm" or "I am"?
IM
ROAN
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LIAO
30 YEARS
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
OLD
AND
CURRENTLY
EMPLOYED AS A CAREGIVER,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
BUT
IT WILL
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
END
MY CONTRACT
NEXT
MONTH.

I AM PSYCHOLOGY GRADUATE AND CERTIFIED CAREGIVER AND
FIRST
AIDER, MY JOB
PRESENTLY
IS THE SAME WITH YOUR JOB OFFER, I AM ALMOST A DECADE WORKING IN THIS LINE OF JOB, I
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go COOKING".
DO COOKING
, CLEANING, AND DRIVING THE CHILDREN TO SCHOOL AND I
ALSO
THEIR TUTOR,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
SO
IF YOU HIRE ME I WILL ASSURE YOU THAT YOU WILL NOT
The verb 'WILL' requires the base form of the verb: "go"
GOING
TO REGRET IT. I WILL
The verb 'WILL' requires the base form of the verb: "go"
GOING
TO
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
LOVE
YOUR CHILD AS MY
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
OWN
EVEN THOUGH
Did you mean "it's" (="it is") instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
ITS
A SHORT PERIOD OF TIME. IF YOU NEED MORE INFORMATION MY NUMBER AND EMAIL
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ADD
ENCLOSE TO THIS LETTER.

I AM LOOKING FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU.

RESPECTFULLY
YOURS, ROAN
Possible spelling mistake found.
LIAO
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. v. 3

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  American English
4 paragraphs
152 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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