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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child 0qg3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am responding to an advertisement in the Trends magazine and I wish to be considered. The advertisement, which had been posted over the weekend, has drawn my attention in grabbing the opportunity. Since, I have recently moved to Australia, living alongside with natives would be my first preference. Moreover, it helps to know the cultural and social background of the local people and also have a gaze around the city. Apart from living, I have all clearance required to work and live here. Also, I have got 2 years of experience in looking after young children from my home country. Although, there could be a difference spending time with children from other country, I am confident enough to handle the six-year mature mentioned. I hope that you consider my reply and provide me an opportunity for living and gaining experience with the local children as well. Yours Faithfully, Tulip Faith
Dear Sir or Madam, I am responding to an advertisement in the Trends magazine and I wish to
be considered
. The advertisement, which had
been posted
over the weekend, has drawn my attention in grabbing the opportunity.

Since, I have recently
moved
to Australia, living alongside with natives would be my
first
preference.
Moreover
, it
helps
to know the cultural and social background of the local
people
and
also
have a gaze around the city.

Apart from living, I have all clearance required to work and
live
here.
Also
, I have
got
2 years of experience in looking after young children from my home country. Although, there could be a difference spending time with children from other country, I am confident
enough
to handle the six-year mature mentioned.

I hope that you consider my reply and provide me an opportunity for living and gaining experience with the local children
as well
.

Yours
Faithfully
, Tulip Faith
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child

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  American English
5 paragraphs
154 words
6.5
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