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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for 6 months and look aftr their 6 year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter 1. explai why you would like the job 2. give details of why you would be suitable person to employ 3. say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for 6 months and look aftr their 6 year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter 1. explai why you would like the job 2. give details of why you would be suitable person to employ 3. say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia aWWP
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Akhila. Recently I have seen an advertisement regarding the requirement for a caretaker for your six year old child. I am writing to inform you of my availability for this position. I am living with my husband in Sydney. As we don't have kids, I always find opportunities to spend time with children. I have 5 years experience working in different baby care units and. It would be great if I get a chance to live with you and take care of your child. I am hard working, calm, pleasant and really patient. We have an orphanage near my home. Usually I visit there whenever I get time. The kids there call me Mom, and I feel so blessed to get so many kids. I love to cook and try different cuisines. Thanks for taking time to read my letter. Please feel free to contact me for further details. Here is my contact 1223456588 Kind regards, Akhila
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is
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Akhila
. Recently I have
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seen
an advertisement regarding the requirement for a caretaker for your six year
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old
child. I am writing to inform you of my availability for this position.

I am living with my husband in Sydney. As we don't have kids, I always find opportunities to spend time with children. I have 5 years experience working in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
baby care units and. It would be great if I
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get
a chance to
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live
with you and take care of your child. I am
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hard working
, calm, pleasant and
really
patient.

We have an orphanage near my home.
Usually
I visit there whenever I
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get
time. The kids there call me Mom, and I feel
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so
blessed to
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get
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so
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many
kids. I
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love
to cook and try
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different
cuisines.

Thanks for taking time to read my letter.
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Please
feel free to contact me for
further
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details
.

Here is my contact 1223456588

Kind regards,

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Akhila

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for 6 months and look aftr their 6 year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter 1. explai why you would like the job 2. give details of why you would be suitable person to employ 3. say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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