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You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for online classes of English, Maths and Science for children. Write a letter to the community college.

You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for online classes of English, Maths and Science for children. Write a letter to the community college. NwBmd
Dear Mr. Doe, With reference to your advertisement for community college on Facebook yesterday, I would like to apply for an online Maths teacher position. I am interested in teaching the course of Mathematics for fifth - grade students. This course can be organized every evening from Monday to Friday and all Saturday and Sunday. I graduated from the Primary Education faculty in Hanoi National University of Education. During my education, I worked part - time tutoring fifth - grade students and used to be a teaching assistant at Unix Math center for three years. Moreover, I love working with children and have a lot of experience to understand the psychology of children. On the other hand, I am a responsible, enthusiastic person that is suitable for teaching pupils. I also can connect easily with students and organize many indoor activities to maintain the interest of students. Especially, I am good at technology, and I can use some online learning applications. I believe that I can teach online in an effective way. It is an advantage of online teaching. I am looking forward to meeting you and will make the most of any opportunity that you give me. Thank you for your consideration. Your sincerely, Mia
Dear Mr. Doe,

With reference to your advertisement for community college on Facebook yesterday, I would like to apply for an
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online
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Maths
teacher position.

I
am interested
in teaching the course of Mathematics for fifth
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-
grade
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students
. This course can
be organized
every evening from Monday to Friday and all Saturday and Sunday.

I graduated from the Primary Education faculty in Hanoi National University of Education. During my education, I worked part
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-
time tutoring fifth
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-
grade
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students
and
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used
to be a teaching assistant at Unix Math center for three years.
Moreover
, I
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love
working with children and have
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a lot of
experience to understand the psychology of children.
On the other hand
, I am a responsible, enthusiastic person
that is
suitable for teaching pupils. I
also
can connect
easily
with
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students
and organize
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many
indoor activities to maintain the interest of
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students
.
Especially
, I am
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good
at technology, and I can
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use
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some
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online
learning applications. I believe that I can teach
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online
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in an effective way
. It is an advantage of
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online
teaching.

I am looking forward to meeting you and will
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make
the most of any opportunity that you give me. Thank you for your consideration.

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Your
sincerely
,

Mia

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for online classes of English, Maths and Science for children. Write a letter to the community college.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
205 words
5.0
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