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You have recently visited a local school in your community. It needs people to help renovate the building and also help with some activities. Write a letter to the principal and say how would you be able to help? When and why would you do it? Who will help you to do it?

Dear Sir, I am writing with regards to the renovation of the school building. I recently visited the school and found out that volunteers are needed to help with the renovation and some other activities With regards to the renovation, i would like to offer my painting services. I feel painting the outer walls of the school building would improve the overall mood of the student's learning experience. It would good to start when the school is closed for the day. Also my painting company would assist in making the process faster. Thanks in advance for your kind cooperation. Yours Faithfully, Raimi Azeezat
Dear Sir,

I am writing
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
the renovation of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
building. I recently visited the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
and found out that volunteers
are needed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with the renovation and
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some
other
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
activities


Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
the renovation,
Did you mean "I"?
i
would like to offer my painting services. I feel painting the outer walls of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
building would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the
overall
mood of the student's learning experience.

It would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
when the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
is closed
for the day.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
my painting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
would assist in making the process faster.

Thanks in advance for your kind cooperation.

Yours
Faithfully
,

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IELTS letter You have recently visited a local school in your community. It needs people to help renovate the building and also help with some activities. Write a letter to the principal and say how would you be able to help? When and why would you do it? Who will help you to do it?

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  American English
7 paragraphs
102 words
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