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You have recently ordered an item on the internet.

You have recently ordered an item on the internet. Qw099
This letter is to inform you that I am a little disappointed with the item that I ordered from your online store last July 29, 2021 Friday. The bag has red stains on the right lower side of it and I thought it would be ok but my friends saw it and told me that the stains were so obvious. It was plain back pack colored in green that has 3 zippered compartments where you can put your stuffs and has an average size for a person that has an average height. It was also on sale by the time that I ordered it so I also want to know if I could have it replaced and get a new one with the same color and design. I am expecting that my concern would be addressed as soon as possible as the back pack will be used for my upcoming vacation. I’m looking forward for your kind confirmation on my Email. Thank you! Yours Sincerely, Benigno F. Ilagan
This letter is to inform you that I am a
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disappointed with the item that I ordered from your online store last July 29,
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Friday. The bag has red stains on the right lower side of it and I
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thought
it would be ok
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my friends
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it and
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me that the stains were
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obvious.

It was plain back pack colored in green that has 3 zippered compartments where you can put your stuffs and has an average size for a person that has an average height.

It was
also
on sale by the time that I ordered it
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so
I
also
want to know if I could have it replaced and
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get
a new one with the same color and design.

I am expecting that my concern would
be addressed
as
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soon
as possible as the back pack will be
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used
for my upcoming vacation. I’m looking forward for your kind confirmation on my Email. Thank you!

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Ilagan

IELTS letter You have recently ordered an item on the internet.

Letter
  American English
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167 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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