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You have recently moved to a different house, and you want to give the news to an English-speaking friend who lives in another country.

You have recently moved to a different house, and you want to give the news to an English-speaking friend who lives in another country. 3LdN5
Dear Peter, I am writing this letter to tell you that we have moved to a new and a bigger house. During lockdown, we realised that our house is really small and it is not possible to live in a three bedroom house with five family members and hence decided to move to a bungalow. It is newly built and has a lot of empty spaces which we can use for the future. It has five bedrooms and a huge modern kitchen attached to the long dining table. It also has a big garden along a swimming pool and a long flowerbed. We have bought two husky dogs for our safety. They love to run in the grass and play together. I would like to invite you to my house as you would really like and enjoy it with me. If the weather is good, we can have a swim too. Yours trulyJulia
Dear Peter, I am writing this letter to
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tell
you that we have
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moved
to a new and a bigger
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house
. During lockdown, we
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realised
that our
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house
is
really
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small
and it is not possible to
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live
in a
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three bedroom
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house
with five family members and
hence
decided to
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move
to a bungalow. It is
newly
built and has
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a lot of
empty spaces which we can
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use
for the future. It has five bedrooms and a huge modern kitchen attached to the long dining table.
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It
also
has a
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big
garden along a swimming pool and a long flowerbed. We have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
two husky dogs for our safety. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to run in the grass and play together. I would like to invite you to my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
as you would
really
like and enjoy it with me. If the weather is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
, we can have a swim too. Yours
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
trulyJulia

IELTS letter You have recently moved to a different house, and you want to give the news to an English-speaking friend who lives in another country.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
152 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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