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You have recently accepted a job in an English-speaking country. When you move to the new country, your children will need to attend school. Write a letter to the headteacher of your children’s new school. In your letter • explain that you are moving from another country • describe your children and their educational needs • ask for some information about the school

You have recently accepted a job in an English-speaking country. When you move to the new country, your children will need to attend school. Write a letter to the headteacher of your children’s new school. In your letter • explain that you are moving from another country • describe your children and their educational needs • ask for some information about the school 1opbq
Dear Sir I am writing this letter to inform you that Delta International L. L. C hired me as a Human Resource Manager at head office in Sydney. The contract between me and my company is done already and next month I will travel to Sydney to join. My family is also with me on a sponsorship visa where my children will study in your school. I will travel from Pakistan to Sydney for the first time and do not have enough information regarding the culture and rules of Australia. In this case I need tiny assistance in the form of getting admission for my children easily at your school. I have two children and they are now studying in second standard at their school. On the contrary they are not well known about overseas culture. Consequently, they will face various problems at the beginning to adjust themselves at a new school with new fellows. They took 1st position in the class during the last exam at school. Is it possible for you to share some details with me regarding their class timetable and fee structure? Please also advise me on where they will stay if there are any boarding facilities in your school. I will be very happy if there are some students with the same Nationality are also studying. I am looking forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully Usman Aslam September, 26 2021
Dear Sir

I am writing this letter to inform you that Delta International L. L. C hired me as a Human Resource Manager at head office in Sydney. The contract between me and my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is done
already and
next
month I will travel to Sydney to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
. My family is
also
with me on a sponsorship visa where my children will study in your school.

I will travel from Pakistan to Sydney for the
first
time and do not have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
information regarding the culture and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
of Australia.
In this case
I need tiny assistance in the form of getting admission for my children
easily
at your school.

I have two
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
children and
they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
studying in second standard at their school.
On the contrary
they are not well known about overseas culture.
Consequently
, they will face various problems at the beginning to adjust themselves at a new school with new fellows. They took 1st position in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
during the last exam at school.

Is it possible for you to share
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
with me regarding their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
timetable and fee structure?
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
also
advise me on where they will stay if there are any boarding facilities in your school. I will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
happy if there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
students with the same Nationality are
also
studying.

I am looking forward to hearing from you

Yours
faithfully


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IELTS letter You have recently accepted a job in an English-speaking country. When you move to the new country, your children will need to attend school. Write a letter to the headteacher of your children’s new school. In your letter • explain that you are moving from another country • describe your children and their educational needs • ask for some information about the school

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235 words
6.0
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